Grade 7 Revising And Editing - Texas

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Set 12 of 24

EDITINGGrade 7, Editing3 of 24Set 1

Read the selection and choose the best answer to each question. Then fill inthe answer on your answer document.These paragraphs are from Nadia’s story about a cooking attempt. Read theparagraphs and look for corrections Nadia needs to make. Then answer the questionsthat follow.(1) Visions of Mikayla’s favorite cooking show flashed through her mind.(2) How exactly did Chef Luciano toss the pizza dough to flatten it and make aperfect circle? (3) Mikayla placed the dough on her right fist and then spins it intothe air, trying to mimic the chef. (4) Unfortunately she didn’t realize how difficult itwould be to control flying dough. (5) Moments later dough bits hung from theceiling, clung to the counter, and fell to the floor. (6) Mikayla’s parents surveyed themessy kitchen when they arrived home although they were surprised, they were notupset about her attempt to make pizza for dinner.(7) “How about going to Tony’s Pizzeria tonight?” suggested Mikayla’s dadwith a grin. (8) “Surely someone at the restauront can show you how to properlytwirl pizza dough.”Grade 7, Editing4 of 24Set 1

1 What change should be made in sentence 3?AInsert a comma after fistBChange then to thanCChange spins to spunD Change it to them2 What is the correct way to write sentence 6?FMikayla’s parents surveyed the messy kitchen when they arrived home, although theywere surprised. They were not upset, about her attempt to make pizza for dinner.G Mikayla’s parents surveyed the messy kitchen when they arrived home, although theywere surprised, they were not upset about her attempt to make pizza for dinner.H Mikayla’s parents surveyed the messy kitchen when they arrived home. Although theywere surprised, they were not upset. About her attempt to make pizza for dinner.JMikayla’s parents surveyed the messy kitchen when they arrived home. Although theywere surprised, they were not upset about her attempt to make pizza for dinner.3 What change should be made in sentence 8?AChange Surely to SimilarlyBChange restauront to restaurantCChange you to themD Change properly to properGrade 7, Editing5 of 24Set 1

Read the selection and choose the best answer to each question. Then fill inthe answer on your answer document.These paragraphs are from Frederico’s letter to his parents. Read the paragraphs andlook for corrections Frederico needs to make. Then answer the following questions.(1) Our family should visit Space Center Houston over spring break.(2) Where else would we have the opportunity to meet an astronaut or touch a rockfrom the moon? (3) We could learn all about space travel and the Solar System.(4) Exhibits display space suits worn by astronauts as well as replicas of a shuttleand a space laboratory.(5) We have talked about spending our vacation at an amusement park.(6) But, Mom doesn’t ride roller coasters, and Dad prefers educational places.(7) Space Center Houston has activities that our whole family is enjoying. (8) Checkout the website for more information about this popular tourist destination and toread the latest news on space exploration. (9) If we go to Space Center Houston,each of us are sure to have a fun and fascinating experience.Grade 7, Editing6 of 24Set 1

4 What change, if any, should be made in sentence 3?FChange could learn to could have learnedG Insert a comma after travelH Change Solar System to solar systemJNo change is needed.5 What is the correct way to write sentence 7?ASpace Center Houston has activities that our whole family enjoyed.BSpace Center Houston has activities that our whole family will enjoy.CSpace Center Houston has activities that our whole family have been enjoying.D Space Center Houston has activities that our whole family had enjoyed.6 What change should be made in sentence 9?FChange If to UnlessG Change us to themH Change are to isJChange fascinating to fasinatingGrade 7, Editing7 of 24Set 1

REVISINGGrade 7, Revising8 of 24Set 1

Read the selection and choose the best answer to each question. Then fill inthe answer on your answer document.Rose wrote a letter to her school newspaper expressing her opinion about thebenefits of taking a martial-arts class. Read Rose’s letter and look for any revisionsshe needs to make. When you finish reading, answer the questions that follow.The Benefits of Martial ArtsDear Students,(1) It’s no secret that kids our age enjoy spending time on a computer or acell phone. (2) Health experts tell us that we need to exercise for at least an hour aday, but tearing ourselves away from our electronic devices can be hard. (3) Playinga team sport is one way to get this exercise. (4) Not every kid wants to join a team.(5) For anyone who wants a fun, healthy way to exercise at his or her own pace, Ihave a suggestion: take a martial-arts class! (6) Learning and practicingself-defense can help improve your physical fitness, mental focus, self-discipline, andsocial skills.(7) I know from experience that studying martial arts can help you improveyour physical fitness. (8) When my parents, at age seven, insisted I get off thecouch and “do something,” I began taking karate. (9) At first it was difficult for meto complete the kicking, punching, and blocking drills in karate. (10) I practicedevery week to get my heart pumping and at striking foam pads with my hands tohelp improve my technique. (11) I have become stronger, faster, and bettercoordinated than I was when I first started. (12) I love feeling healthier and knowingthat I can defend myself if necessary.(13) Taking a martial arts class is not just good for improving physicalfitness. (14) Classes usually begin with breathing exercises and a time of silence tohelp clear the mind. (15) By engaging in these activities, students learn how to traintheir minds to be calm and alert. (16) Developing strong mental focus helpsparticipants respond to an instructor’s commands and helps participants sense whento adjust their form. (17) Additionally instructors teach students how to focus theirenergy so they can kick and punch with more power and accuracy. (18) Havingstrong mental focus helps students defeat their opponents during a match.Grade 7, Revising9 of 24Set 1

(19) The longer people train in martial arts, the better they become atself-discipline. (20) They learn that self-discipline and determination are needed toadvance in martial arts. (21) By really pushing themselves to improve, people learnto conquer self-doubt. (22) This determination can even lead to better grades andbehavior at school. (23) One study revealed that students’ behavior in schoolimproved after they attended just 10 weeks of martial-arts training thanks to itsemphasis on self-discipline.(24) Studying martial arts has social benefits too. (25) Instructors stress theimportance of respecting others, and respect is the basis for any successfulrelationship. (26) Also, martial-arts classes are often filled with students of all agesand backgrounds. (27) I think martial arts is the best sport because many peoplecan practice it together. (28) Participants will have a chance to develop newfriendships while learning new skills in a supportive environment.(29) Learning to master martial arts takes effort and dedication, but thebenefits are countless. (30) Improved physical fitness, mental focus, self-discipline,and social skills are just a few of the many benefits the martial arts have to offer.(31) And, you can practice on your own time, at your own pace, in the comfort ofyour home.Sincerely,RoseGrade 7, Revising10 of 24Set 1

7 What it the MOST effective way for Rose to combine sentences 3 and 4?APlaying a team sport is one way to get this exercise, so not every kid wants to join ateam.BPlaying a team sport is one way to get this exercise, but not every kid wants to join ateam.CNot every kid wants to join a team, also playing a team sport is one way to get thisexercise.D Because playing a team sport is one way to get this exercise, not every kid wants to join ateam.8 Sentence 8 lacks clarity. What is the MOST effective change Rose can make to improve theclarity of this sentence?FI began taking karate at age seven when my parents insisted I get off the couch and “dosomething.”G I began taking karate, when my parents at age seven insisted I get off the couch and “dosomething.”H My parents insisted I get off the couch and “do something” when I began taking karate atage seven.JWhen I began taking karate, my parents insisted I get off the couch and “do something”at age seven.9 Which of the following sentences should replace sentence 13 to serve as a more effectivetopic sentence of this paragraph?AAs if the physical benefits weren’t enough, participating in martial arts also helps kidsdevelop strong mental focus.BIn martial arts class, the instruction goes beyond learning how to perform physical movesmore effectively.CMany people are surprised by the variety of benefits that they receive from taking amartial arts class.D Taking a martial arts class will certainly help someone get in better shape physically, butthat’s not the only benefit.Grade 7, Revising11 of 24Set 1

10 Which word would be a more precise word to use than really in sentence 21?FactuallyG quicklyH honestlyJconstantly11 Which sentence in the fifth paragraph (sentences 24–28) is extraneous and should bedeleted?ASentence 25BSentence 26CSentence 27D Sentence 2812 Which sentence should Rose add after sentence 31 to improve the conclusion of her letter?FWhy do you think these classes are so popular?G Are there any other benefits you want to know about?H Do you see why it’s better for you than using a computer?JWhy not put down your phone, try a class, and see for yourself?Grade 7, Revising12 of 24Set 1

Set 213 of 24

EDITINGGrade 7, Editing14 of 24Set 2

Read the selection and choose the best answer to each question. Then fill inthe answer on your answer document.These paragraphs are from Nadia’s story about a cooking attempt. Read theparagraphs and look for corrections Nadia needs to make. Then answer the questionsthat follow.(1) Visions of Mikayla’s favorite cooking show flashed through her mind.(2) How exactly did Chef Luciano toss the pizza dough; to flatten it and make aperfect circle? (3) Mikayla placed the dough on her right fist and then spun it intothe air, trying to mimic the chef. (4) Otherwise she didn’t realize how difficult itwould be to control flying dough. (5) Moments later dough bits hung from theceiling, clung to the counter, and fell to the floor. (6) Mikayla’s parents surveyed themessy kitchen when they arrived home. (7) Although they were surprised, theywere not upset about her attempt to make pizza for dinner.(8) “How about going to Tony’s pizzeria tonight?” suggested Mikayla’s dadwith a grin. (9) “Surely someone at the restaurant can show you how to properlytwirl pizza dough.”Grade 7, Editing15 of 24Set 2

1 What change should be made in sentence 2?AChange Chef Luciano to chef LucianoBChange toss to tossesCDelete the semicolon after doughD Insert a comma after it2 What change, if any, should be made in sentence 4?FChange Otherwise to UnfortunatelyG Change didn’t realize to doesn’t realizeH Change difficult to dificultJNo change is needed.3 What change should be made in sentence 8?ADelete the quotation marksBChange going to having goneCChange Tony’s pizzeria to Tony’s PizzeriaD Change with a grin to over a grinGrade 7, Editing16 of 24Set 2